My Special Person - Author - John

 Below is John's 'Special Person' writing. 

We are learning to describe in detail. 
This means including deeper features such as:

• personal voice
• ideas that are important to the story
• a clear structure
• exciting vocabulary

Please support our learning by providing feedback in the form of compliments and wishes.  This exemplar might be helpful .


My Special Person
My mum her real name is Janice she looks like a bright star in the 
sky she has long brown hair and blue eyes she wears her hair in a pony tail and she wears a mickey mouse t shirt and pants.

She helps me gain my confidence in my dancing. she takes very good care of me. she hates disobedience. she loves to travel and when ever I ignore her she  says that the express  will come and pick me up and take me away. She helps me with every thing I do and that’s why my  special person  is special to me.